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BeitragVerfasst am: 20 März 2007 - 17:07:11    Titel:

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1. There are arguments on both sides. However, in my oppinion the internet is bassically an excellent and a terrible thing for the world.

Mach doch "both an excellent and a terrible" , hört sich besser an

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2. It exist many advantage and some disadvantage for the world wide web.

Anstelle von It exist benutzt "there are " und da du many benutzt sollte an s an advantages und disad.... ran. Und ich persönlich würde das for durch of ersetzen.

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2. The disadvantage is at example in the internet exist a website which contain pornographic pictures and this is not good for the children.

One disadvantage for example are websites containing....

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4. This is a bad education and cause for crime

also wenn man deinen Satz übersetzen soll dann würde ich sowas benutzen wie "has a bad influence on children's education..."

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6. The internet cam make addicted.

People/Children/User can easily become addicted to the internet

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7. Many young people spend a mostly her free time in front of of the computer.

Many young people mostly spend their leisure time in front of their computers. Wobei ich nicht weiß ob mein Satz mit mostly so elegant ist

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8. This is not good for her evolution and for the social contact, when I me not absolute ( unconditional) lock out.

From this(quote 7) we can deduce that the internet can have impacts on children's delevopments concerning their social integration/adjustment...

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9. In addition you can should to refrain from oneself in the internet, yet this can have successions, at example when the English teacher make across badly joke.

Furthermore people should stop sharing videoclips of themselves in the internet as this could for example give a teacher the possibility to make a fool of those people

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10. Many people say the internet is a terrible monster.

benutz describe as . deins ginge aber natürlich auch

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11. Neverthesless has the internet many advantage.

Nevertheless the internet has many advantages

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12. The most people in Europe have a computer at home and use the computer every day.
A majority of people living in Europe....
Weiß eigentlich jemand ob man bei majority has oder have sagt? habe beides in England gehört. Ich muss jetzt weg aber ich kann später weitermachen. Bei mir schließe ich Fehler nicht aus. Deine Ideen sind aber sehr gut
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BeitragVerfasst am: 20 März 2007 - 23:48:00    Titel:

18. I look oft on the music website in the internet www.musiccommunity-sachsenanhalt.de , where I inform me over regional music.
19. That is a regional forum where some bands from bands from Sachsen- Anhalt suggest oneself and her music.
20. I find the idea from the homepage very good.
23. Also you can in the internet downloading films, music and other things.

24. I hear many music in the internet at example pop, rock or metal ( ( heavy metal, trash metal. black metal, metalcore and powermetal)


kann jemand bitte mal die Grammatik bei den 5 Sätzen verbessern
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BeitragVerfasst am: 20 März 2007 - 23:56:35    Titel:

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18. I look oft on the music website in the internet www.musiccommunity-sachsenanhalt.de , where I inform me over regional music.

I oftenm check out/visit my favourite music website in the internet : url , where I inform myself about local music

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19. That is a regional forum where some bands from bands from Sachsen- Anhalt suggest oneself and her music.

That is a regiona bulletin board where some bands from SA present themselves and their music

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20. I find the idea from the homepage very good.

I really like the purpose of this website

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23. Also you can in the internet downloading films, music and other things.

Besides, the internet is a perfect and even the only place to download movies, music and other files

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24. I hear many music in the internet at examole pop, rock or metal ( ( heavy metal, trash metal. black metal, metalcore and powermetal)

I often listen to music in the internet for example...
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BeitragVerfasst am: 21 März 2007 - 00:23:04    Titel:

21. This community represents soon in coperation with Goitzsche radio a compilation.

den noch
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BeitragVerfasst am: 21 März 2007 - 00:27:11    Titel:

gib den mal bei www.spellcheck.net ein.
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BeitragVerfasst am: 21 März 2007 - 01:19:21    Titel:

Übrigens das habe ich gern gemacht
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BeitragVerfasst am: 28 März 2007 - 19:29:00    Titel:

Ich hätte eine ganz dringende Bitte!

Ich wollte fragen, ob mir vielleicht morgen jmd. am späten Nachmittag einen Text, eine Debatte auf Englisch durchschaun kann. Ich habe am Freitag die letzte schriftl. Arbeit vor der Matura (in Deutschland Abitur) und die muss positiv sein!
Als Thema kommt Travelling und es kommt sicher eine Debatte mit 3-4 Leuten, ich würde morgen eine schreiben, es wäre wirklich toll wenn diese wer durchschauen kann, da ich nicht so gut bin in Englisch!
Bin leider nicht früher dazugekommen auf Grund anderer schulischen Prüfungen usw...

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BeitragVerfasst am: 07 Jun 2009 - 19:04:53    Titel:

bitte korrigieren:-)



Robert Cormier was born in January 1925 and dies in November 2000. He spend all his life in Leominster, a little town in Massachusetts. He starts writing at school where he has been praised for his poetry. At the age of nineteen he had his first short story published when a college teacher, sent one of his stories to a national magazine without his knowledge. His first novel for teenagers, The Chocolate war, had published in the UK in 1975. He quickly established a reputation as a brilliant writer and gains a lot of awards. Robert Cormier had also been a journalist for more than 30 years. He had a wife, 3 daughters and a son.

The novel After the First Death was published in 1992.


The novel deals with a terrorist group that has already committed a number of terrorism acts in the USA. In the middle of the novel stands a fall of kidnapping: Four terrorists,among them the expert Artkin and his student Miro. The terrorists hijack a summer camp bus and constrain the bus driver called Kate to stop the bus on an abandoned old railway bridge. Kate follows the given orders but tries to find some way to escape.
Miro’s job was to kill the bus driver. This should be his first kill.
Artkin gives the entire children brown cakes with dope in it, which makes the children sleepy and quiet. One child was allergic to the drug and dies. Artkin throw him from the bridge, like a warning for the police. In meantime, Artkin made requirements for Inner Delta, a secret FBI location. Artkin wanted them to release fifteen political prisoners. He wanted 10 million dollars and he wanted information about an American secret security program.
When Antibbe, another terrorist had accidentally been shot in his chest, Artkin killed Raymond. Raymond has become a friend from Kate, because he was the strongest of all the children and hasn’t taken the brown cake with dope. Raymond could be helping with the escape but that was too late now.
When the hijackers hear the bad news that their leader has been captured by the agents of Inner Delta Artkin asks for evidence because he doesn’t trust the agents. Someone who isn’t a police officer should bring Artkin evidence.
The general of Inner Delta called Rufus decides to send his own son Ben. Ben arrives at the bus and has to take off all his clothes. The hijackers check if Ben doesn’t have any weapons with him. Ben told Artkin everything about the Inner Delta after a couple of kicks. However, Ben told Artkin not the whole truth so he has said that Inner Delta attacks the hijackers at nine thirty but the real time of point is eight o’clock.
During the attack of Inner Delta Ben has been shot in his chest.
The hijackers Stroll and Artkin has been killed. Miro and Kate escaped into the wood. Kate tried to intimidate Miro to make Miro believe Artkin was his real Father. Miro gets upset and kills Kate. Then he walks to the road takes the car of a killed man and drives away to start a new life.
Ben hasn't be killed by the bullet in his chest, he was just in a coma. When he came out of the coma, he starts writing a book about the happenings that day at the bridge. With this part the novel starts.
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BeitragVerfasst am: 07 Jun 2009 - 19:33:50    Titel:

phiL89 hat folgendes geschrieben:
Robert Cormier was born in January 1925 and died in November 2000. He spent all his life in Leominster, a little town in Massachusetts. He started writing at school where he was praised for his poetry. At the age of nineteen he had his first short story published when a college teacher sent one of his stories to a national magazine without his knowledge. His first novel for teenagers, The Chocolate War, was published in the UK in 1975. He quickly established a reputation as a brilliant writer and received a lot of awards. Robert Cormier had also been a journalist for more than 30 years. He had a wife, 3 daughters and a son.

The novel After the First Death was published in 1992.


The novel deals with a terrorist group that has already committed a number of terrorist acts (oder: "acts of terrorism") in the USA. In the middle of the novel a kidnapping occurs: Four terrorists, including the expert Artkin and his student Miro, hijack a summer camp bus and command the bus driver called Kate to stop the bus on an abandoned old railway bridge. Kate follows the given orders but tries to find some way to escape.
Miro’s job was to kill the bus driver. This was to be be his first kill.
Artkin feeds all of the children some brown cakes with dope in it, which makes the children sleepy and quiet. One child was allergic to the drug and died. Artkin threw him from the bridge, in order to serve as a warning for the police. In meantime, Artkin made demands of Inner Delta, a secret FBI location. Artkin wanted them to release fifteen political prisoners. He wanted 10 million dollars and he wanted information about an American secret security program.
When Antibbe, another terrorist, was accidentally shot in his chest, Artkin killed Raymond. Raymond had become a friend of Kate's, because he was the strongest of all the children and hadn't eaten the brown cake with dope. Raymond could have helped with the escape but now that was impossible.
When the hijackers hear the bad news that their leader has been captured by the agents of Inner Delta, Artkin asks for evidence because he doesn’t trust the agents. Someone who isn’t a police officer is to bring Artkin the evidence.
The general of Inner Delta called Rufus decides to send his own son Ben. Ben arrives at the bus and has to take off all his clothes. The hijackers check if Ben has any weapons with him. Ben told Artkin everything about the Inner Delta after a couple of kicks. However, Ben didn't tell Artkin the whole truth, saying that Inner Delta was planning to attack the hijackers at nine thirty, but the real time of the planned attack was eight o’clock.
During Inner Delta's attack, Ben was been shot in his chest.
The hijackers Stroll and Artkin were been killed. Miro and Kate escaped into the woods. Kate tried to intimidate Miro to make Miro believe Artkin was his real father. Miro gets upset and kills Kate. Then he walks to the road, takes the car of a killed man and drives away to start a new life.
Ben hasn't be killed by the bullet in his chest, he was just put into a coma. When he came out of the coma, he starts writing a book about the happenings of that day at the bridge. With this part the novel starts. (ends???)
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BeitragVerfasst am: 07 Jun 2009 - 19:47:31    Titel:

danke zwanglos!
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