Sammelthread für Korrekturen

weaver · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 03.03.2006 Beiträge: 2472

poste mal die erste seite
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Luethien · Junior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 19.04.2007 Beiträge: 80

hallo!

ich muss eine zusammenfassung über einen zeitungsartikel schreiben und befürchte, dass sich da fehler eingeschlichen haben.

wäre schön, wenn sich jemand die zeit nehmen würde ihn korrektur zu lesen.

bin für jede antwort dankbar.

lg

„UK employers must retain 50+ workers“

The article was published on the Work Foundation’s website at "www.theworkfoundation.com".

The article deals with an actual report of the Pensions Commission which main content is the essential stopping of too early retirement and redundancies of people over 50.
So what are the basic reasons for the retirements? First there is the belief that the increasing number of retirements will produce much more pressure on the executers. Another reason is that many employees think that old workers are more traditional or have an outmoded point of view than their younger colleagues.
However, when people have to work till 67 or 70, there have to be a rethinking. Some “solutions” for involving such people over 60 are to give them the chance to work flexible by home working, part-time working or shift working. Because of this their experience and knowledge do not get lost for the company.
Also the State profits from a raised retirement age because than he can finance the pensions, which are given to the actual retirees, by an increase of the taxes.
Another alternative for people over 50s can be self-employment. They can use their experience and knowledge for running the business. This is not the only reason; also the State supports them with higher survival rates than younger people.

In conclusion it can be said an increasing retirement age means that people have to save parts of their income during their extended man-years to have a financial safeguard.

weaver · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 03.03.2006 Beiträge: 2472

executers?

main-years?

actual = tatsächlich. meinste das?
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Luethien · Junior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 19.04.2007 Beiträge: 80

hmmm ...

ok. bei executers hab ich mich vertippt, meinte eigentlich executives Embarassed

mit man-year wollte ich die Arbeitsjahre ausdrücken. konnte dazu leider kein anderes wort finden. Crying or Very sad

und bei actual meinte ich current, tschuldigung. Embarassed

danke fürs drüberlesen.

sonst ist der text aber ok? oder? mir liegen zusammenfassungen leider nicht besonders. Embarassed

Ratti · Newbie Anmeldungsdatum: 23.09.2007 Beiträge: 28

tini23 · Newbie Anmeldungsdatum: 27.01.2008 Beiträge: 6

I had the honor to follow (sagt man das in Englisch?) the head of the department and to observe his clinical work during surgery, on the acute day ward and on his ward round.

Für meinen Curriculum Vitae für die Auslandsfamulatur

Zwanglos · Verfasst am: 28 Jan 2008 - 00:28:57 Titel:

acute day ward?
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weaver · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 03.03.2006 Beiträge: 2472

es wäre hilfreich zu wissen, was du - auf deutsch - sagen wolltest. so ist das nicht korrigierbar.
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tini23 · Newbie Anmeldungsdatum: 27.01.2008 Beiträge: 6

oh,.. sorry hab wirklich total vergessen hinzuschreiben was ich sagen wollte.

es geht um die famulatur ( praktium im spital)

Ich hatte die Ehre dem Primar zu folgen und ihm bei seiner Arbeit im Abulanzbereich wie auch Stationär zu beobachten. ...

so in etwa

lg

Kida@17 · Verfasst am: 02 Feb 2008 - 14:49:33 Titel:

By a snatch your life is takeing.
Mit einem kurzen Augenblick nimmt man dir das Leben.

Ein Stich gleitet in dein Herz.
A stitch slide in your heart.

The Tears of my soul.
Die Tränen meiner Seele.

Könnte mir jemand bitte korriegieren ob das englische so richtig geschrieben ist und auch noch die Zeitform beachten???
Weil ich versuche mein Englisch zu verbessern und versuche einen Song vons deutsche ins englische zu übersetzen.
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schnegge1990 · Verfasst am: 09 Feb 2008 - 22:10:44 Titel:

Wäre lieb, wenn ihr auf meins auch mal einen Blick werfen würdet. Thema: literarische Einordnung von Brave New World (Aldous Huxley).

"Brave New World" plays in the future in the year 632 after Ford. That correspond to the year 2540 after Christ. The book is a science fiction novel and the main element of science-fiction is the assembly line system to all domains of live and death. Another element is perfection of engineering and develepmonts, which were in 1932 still in its infancy: birth control, eugenics, mass psychology, advertisement psychology and communication media, which was threatened to make the writing word superfluously. Another point is the speculation about the perfect drug. "Brave New World" describes, whats one had expected for the future in 1932: a stable affluent society, with only happy people. So "BNW" is more a parody on a science-fiction novel, because the describe optimum automatically excludes any more progress. The Word "Utopia" describes the ideal state, but his realization is unrealistic. This sort of future novel has his name frome de description of the best and happiest society on the - not exist - island Utopia, which was presented by Thomas Morusin in 1516. In the twentieth century another sort of future novel arise, Dystopia or Anti-Utopia. This genre looks pessimistic to the future. Dystopia tries to stop the current developments, which could end in a disaster, by writing horror scenarios. The Novel "BNW" takes part in Dystopia, because Huxley criticized the development in the domains genetic engineering and digitalization.

Danke schonmal!
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schnegge1990 · Verfasst am: 10 Feb 2008 - 12:47:57 Titel:

Domains = Bereiche?
engineering and development = Technik und Erfindungen?
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Zwanglos · Verfasst am: 10 Feb 2008 - 15:34:11 Titel:

Ooooh jetzt klar.

G'scheid;le · Full Member Anmeldungsdatum: 05.09.2007 Beiträge: 186

Hello guys,

I wrote a couple of sentences again.

- He played soccer cryingly yesterday.
- She lay laughin' on the chair.

Thanks for your correction!

Zwanglos · Verfasst am: 10 Feb 2008 - 20:22:26 Titel:

cryingly?
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G'scheid;le · Full Member Anmeldungsdatum: 05.09.2007 Beiträge: 186

I thought that cryingly is an adverb und means "weinend"!

-> Er hat gestern weinend Fußball gespielt.

is it wrong?

weaver · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 03.03.2006 Beiträge: 2472

cringly würde sich aber auf das Spielen beziehen. ein weinendes Spielen? kaum.

he played terribly.

he played football, crying.
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G'scheid;le · Full Member Anmeldungsdatum: 05.09.2007 Beiträge: 186

lila_va_gina · Full Member Anmeldungsdatum: 07.02.2008 Beiträge: 281

he played soccer yesterday, crying.

oder: while playing soccer yesterday, he cried/ was crying.

das adverb hört sich hier stilistisch schlecht an.
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weaver · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 03.03.2006 Beiträge: 2472

schnegge1990 · Verfasst am: 11 Feb 2008 - 23:33:56 Titel:

boy_007 · Full Member Anmeldungsdatum: 04.09.2007 Beiträge: 165

In the text passage (p. 62 l.9 -p.64 l.3) Marco describes the differences between Manhattan and Central Park and shows a preference of the Park instead of the city. The protagonist, Marco Stanley Fogg, has an aversion to the streets full of people and noise and defines it as a “massive gridwork of buildings and towers”. He criticises that you have to adopt a specific attitude so that you don’t catch somebody’s eye. On top of this, in the crowd he becomes aware of his poverty and feels himself as a loser. Whereas the Central Park affords him the opportunity to be alone from the rest of the world and is able to do what he wants, especially to withdraw into the peaceful harmony. Marco describes the Park, where he can live as a homeless and does not depend on money any more, as a confides sanctuary where he doesn’t perceive his poverty in a such big extent as in the city. Furthermore the Park helps him to live in balance. Marco's description of the park stresses the freedom from any social conventions or restraints and the liberty to choose ones own way of life, a freedom that does not seem possible in the streets.

Pfandkuchen · Junior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 16.03.2007 Beiträge: 65

Wäre super klasse, wenn mir das jemand korregieren könnte. Wenn ihr keine Lust auf alles habt (was ich verstehen könnte) würde ich mich auch über einen kleinen Teil sehr freuen! Ich bekomme eine speziall Note auf meine Grammatik und möcht nich total doof darstehen Danke schonmal!
A history teacher shows his class a film about Nazi Germany but they can’t understand why nobody undertook anything against it. Because of that their teacher decides to make a similar situation with a classroom experiment called the wave. He starts with some practices like sitting up straight and stands up if they want something to say. Surprisingly the students obey in the next days without any requests. Ben Ross, the teacher appoints the wave as an identification symbol. The best at the new community is that all members are automatically friends, even the most disliked boy Robert. Besides he wants to be the bodyguard of his teacher. The members try to convince others for joining the wave but some students don’t like the wave and write bad articles about it in the school magazine. Because of that it comes repeatedly to small fights. And the class experiment has influence on different relations between friends. Some parents and teachers don’t agree with the experiment. The principal ask Ben Ross for stooping it promptly. After that he announces a meeting of all members. There he shows his students the film which they saw at the beginning. Ben shouts “There is your leader” and on the screen appears Adolf Hitler. Ben’s statement that they have made some good Nazis shocked them. But they accept that it could happen again. They learnt a lot about this experiment and from now on they see the Nazi time with other eyes.

I think this is the most important scene because I was very surprised about this ending. I thought the students would refuse against the end of the wave but instead they accept it easily. It seems to me that their history teacher wants to try out if they set against his instructions. But they react exactly like the people for 60 years.

My book belongs basically to the genre historical fiction because every story contains one important event in history. And in my book the event is definitely the World war two. But it’s only a replay of it because it doesn’t happen at same time.

Actually the name of author is Todd Strasser but he created the second Pseudo name Morton Rhue because he was not allowed to publish two books with the same name. He was born on the 5th of May in 1950 in New York City. After two years Todd and his family moved to Roslyn Heights. There he changed the school for three times. After finish school he was for two years a street musician. Then he decided to studied literature. In 1978 Todd sold his first novel called “Angel Dust Blues”. He used the money to launch a fortune company. But he sold more fortune cookies than book on the next 12 years. Since 1993 he has written many movie novelizations and until today he published more than 100 books.

The leading character in the novel is the young history teacher called Ben Ross. He teaches for 2 years at the Gordon High. I think he is not older then 30 years. Ben is wedded to Christy Ross but they have no child. His appearance isn’t very flashily. He has brown-wavy hairs and wears everyday a suit with a fitting tie. Ben belongs to the kind of human who can sink completely into a thing if they are really interested. Ben is a well-like teacher because of his suspenseful and varied lessons. Even some teachers are impressed of his energy, employment and creativity. The other think he is too young, naïve and irresponsible.

weaver · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 03.03.2006 Beiträge: 2472

OK, ich fang mal an:

Wäre super klasse, wenn mir das jemand korrigieren könnte. Wenn ihr keine Lust auf alles habt (was ich verstehen könnte) würde ich mich auch über einen kleinen Teil sehr freuen! Ich bekomme eine eigeneNote fürmeine Grammatik und möcht nich total doof darstehen Danke schonmal!
A history teacher shows his class a film about Nazi Germany but they can’t understand why nobody undertook anything against the Nazis. Because of that their teacher decides to create a similar situation with a classroom experiment called "The Wave". He starts with some practices like sitting up straight and standing up if the students want to say something . Surprisingly the students obey in the next days without any requests. Ben Ross, the teacher appoints the wave as an identification symbol. The best at the new community is that all members are automatically friends, even the most disliked boy Robert. Besides he wants to be the bodyguard of his teacher. The members try to convince others for joining the wave but some students don’t like the wave and write bad articles about it in the school magazine. Because of that it comes repeatedly to small fights. And the class experiment has influence on different relations between friends. Some parents and teachers don’t agree with the experiment. The principal ask Ben Ross for stooping it promptly. After that he announces a meeting of all members. There he shows his students the film which they saw at the beginning. Ben shouts “There is your leader” and on the screen appears Adolf Hitler. Ben’s statement that they have made some good Nazis shocked them. But they accept that it could happen again. They learnt a lot about this experiment and from now on they see the Nazi time with other eyes.

I think this is the most important scene because I was very surprised about this ending. I thought the students would refuse against the end of the wave but instead they accept it easily. It seems to me that their history teacher wants to try out if they set against his instructions. But they react exactly like the people for 60 years.

My book belongs basically to the genre historical fiction because every story contains one important event in history. And in my book the event is definitely the World war two. But it’s only a replay of it because it doesn’t happen at same time.

Actually the name of author is Todd Strasser but he created the second Pseudo name Morton Rhue because he was not allowed to publish two books with the same name. He was born on the 5th of May in 1950 in New York City. After two years Todd and his family moved to Roslyn Heights. There he changed the school for three times. After finish school he was for two years a street musician. Then he decided to studied literature. In 1978 Todd sold his first novel called “Angel Dust Blues”. He used the money to launch a fortune company. But he sold more fortune cookies than book on the next 12 years. Since 1993 he has written many movie novelizations and until today he published more than 100 books.

The leading character in the novel is the young history teacher called Ben Ross. He teaches for 2 years at the Gordon High. I think he is not older then 30 years. Ben is wedded to Christy Ross but they have no child. His appearance isn’t very flashily. He has brown-wavy hairs and wears everyday a suit with a fitting tie. Ben belongs to the kind of human who can sink completely into a thing if they are really interested. Ben is a well-like teacher because of his suspenseful and varied lessons. Even some teachers are impressed of his energy, employment and creativity. The other think he is too young, naïve and irresponsible.
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Pfandkuchen · Junior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 16.03.2007 Beiträge: 65

Danke für korrigieren auch wenn ich die deutsche Korrektur leicht als Beleidigung betrachte... danke

boy_007 · Full Member Anmeldungsdatum: 04.09.2007 Beiträge: 165

so ist der weaver halt... arrogant und bekommt bei dem kleinsten Rechtschreibfehler einen warmen Schlüpfer!

weaver · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 03.03.2006 Beiträge: 2472

ok, hier noch paar arrogante hinweise:

The leading character in the novel is the young history teacher called Ben Ross. He teaches for 2 years at the Gordon High. I think he is not older then 30 years. Ben is wedded to Christy Ross but they have no child. His appearance isn’t very flashily. He has brown-wavy hairs and everyday wears a suit with a fitting tie. Ben belongs to the kind of human who can sink completely into a thing if they are really interested. Ben is a well-like teacher because of his suspenseful and varied lessons. Even some teachers are impressed of his energy, employment and creativity. The other think he is too young, naïve and irresponsible.
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espritgirl · Newbie Anmeldungsdatum: 10.01.2006 Beiträge: 28 Wohnort: Aachen

Hallo Zusammen Laughing

,

Ich würde mir sehr freuen, wenn mir jemand meine Summary zum Thema "American History X" korrigieren könnte (Grammatik - Rechtschreibe- Stil- und Logikfehler).

Danny Vinyard is summoning to the schoolmaster, Bob Sweeney, because he has written an essay of Adolf Hitler’s book “Mein Kampf”. As an education measure the schoolmaster demands Danny to write, analyze and interpret an essay about the personal background of Danny’s older brother, Derek, who is a taken into custody right - wing extremist.
Derek Vinyard has been becoming an idol of the right - wing extremists in Venice Beach. In tandem with Cameron Alexander he had federated frustrated teenagers to gangs.
At the same day Derek will be release from prison. Meanwhile he has forsworn the extreme right – wing ideology and he tries to put Danny off being in the gang. Danny models himself on Derek and he wants to emulate Derek. Derek is after his conversion horrified by it.
Danny starts writing the essay.
The first flashback is the beginning of the film. Derek Vinyard and his girlfriend have intercourse. During this time three colored boys start breaking into
Derek `s car. His little brother Danny sees this situation and runs to his brother to tell him about it. Derek is angry and runs weapond with a pistol out of the house. He shoots one of the men and wounds a second. Derek kills the wounded man by ordering him to place his mouth on the curb and then he stomps on the back of his head, effectively breaking his jaw and neck. Another flashback is a situation on a parking place where Derek and the teenagers, who he had recruit, are planning a violent hold – up to a supermarket which is led by Asians.
Another flashback is a lunch when Derek’s Jewish teacher Mr. Murray, who had an affair with his mum, was their guest. A discussion escalated about violence in quarter. Derek said hostile to foreigners hate-mottos, he affronted him verbally because he is Jewish. His family was horrified by it and Derek got rough with them.
At a party with right – win extremists Derek intimates his exit to Cameron Alexander. Because of this his friend Seth holds him at gunpoint. Derek and his brother Danny are able to resort. Danny is visibly disappointed about Derek’s departure from the gang and Derek tells him his experiences during his time in prison. Derek got to know abasement because he is a white man. At first he hoped to make friends. He makes friends with a coloured person. They worked together in the laundry. Derek detected that the white men trade with the black men. They sold drugs to the colored people. Derek did not want to accept it and because of this the group of white people beat up and violate him.
Bob Sweeney visited him at the infirmary and induced him to change.
On the next day Derek accompanies Danny to school because Danny wants to hand over his essay. In front of the toilets Danny has an encounter with a coloured boy, who was threatened once by Danny. The black boy shoots dead Danny. The film concludes with the death of Danny Vinyard and his brother Derek who embraces crying his brother.

Muss ich eigentlich einen Einleitungssatz schreiben? Die Inhalte werden ja meistens in der Einleitung aufgefriffen (zumindest bei mir).

Tausend Dank!

Sarah

PS: Aus Fairness möchte ich sagen, dass ich die Frage auch auf www.vorhilfe.de gestellt habe.

weaver · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 03.03.2006 Beiträge: 2472

hier mal paar fehler:

anny Vinyard is summoning to the schoolmaster, Bob Sweeney, because he has written an essay of Adolf Hitler’s book “Mein Kampf”. As an education measure the schoolmaster demands Danny to write, analyze and interpret an essay about the personal background of Danny’s older brother, Derek, who is a taken into custody right - wing extremist.
Derek Vinyard has been becoming an idol of the right - wing extremists in Venice Beach. In tandem with Cameron Alexander he had federated (???) frustrated teenagers to gangs.
At the same day Derek will be release from prison. Meanwhile he has forsworn the extreme right – wing ideology and he tries to put Danny off being in the gang. Danny models himself on Derek and he wants to emulate Derek. Derek is after his conversion horrified by it.
Danny starts writing the essay.
The first flashback is the beginning of the film. Derek Vinyard and his girlfriend have intercourse. During this time three colored boys start breaking into
Derek `s car. His little brother Danny sees this situation and runs to his brother to tell him about it. Derek is angry and runs weapond with a pistol out of the house. He shoots one of the men and wounds a second. Derek kills the wounded man by ordering him to place his mouth on the curb and then he stomps on the back of his head, effectively breaking his jaw and neck. Another flashback is a situation on a parking place where Derek and the teenagers, who he had recruit, are planning a violent hold – up to a supermarket which is led by Asians.
Another flashback is a lunch when Derek’s Jewish teacher Mr. Murray, who had an affair with his mum, was their guest. A discussion escalated about violence in quarter. Derek said hostile to foreigners hate-mottos, he affronted him verbally because he is Jewish. His family was horrified by it and Derek got rough with them.
At a party with right – win extremists Derek intimates his exit to Cameron Alexander. Because of this his friend Seth holds him at gunpoint. Derek and his brother Danny are able to resort. Danny is visibly disappointed about Derek’s departure from the gang and Derek tells him his experiences during his time in prison. Derek got to know abasement because he is a white man. At first he hoped to make friends. He makes friends with a coloured person. They worked together in the laundry. Derek detected that the white men trade with the black men. They sold drugs to the colored people. Derek did not want to accept it and because of this the group of white people beat up and violate him.
Bob Sweeney visited him at the infirmary and induced him to change.
On the next day Derek accompanies Danny to school because Danny wants to hand over his essay. In front of the toilets Danny has an encounter with a coloured boy, who was threatened once by Danny. The black boy shoots dead Danny. The film concludes with the death of Danny Vinyard and his brother Derek who embraces crying his brother.

außerdem: right-wing und nicht right - wing
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Luethien · Junior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 19.04.2007 Beiträge: 80

hallo!

hab morgen einen wichtigen test und dazu üb ich ein paar texte. ich wollte fragen ob ihr vielleicht mal über die folgende beschreibung drüberlesen könntet und mir bei grammatikfehlern helfen könntet.

bin dankbar für jede antwort.

lg

hier ist der link zu der statistik: http://e-statistik.blogspot.com/

TEXT 1

The line graph shows the poverty rages by three age groups expressed in percentage points. It is based on figures provided by the U.S. Census Bureau. The period under review is the years from 1966 to 2002.

There are a blue, an orange and a purple line. The blue one stands for adults aged 65 and over, the orange one represents the children aged 17 and under and the purple one stands for adults aged 18 to 64.

In 1966 the blue line stood at 28 %. The figures increased rapidly until 1967 when the reach a peak at 30 %. Then they fall dramatically during the next one year. After that they remained stable until 1972 when they were hitting a low of 15 % in 1974. During the next 28 years the figures were subject of big and small variations.

In 1966 the orange line began to decrease from 17 % to 14 % until 1969 where it began to increase slowly till 1975 and remained stable for four years at 16 %. Then the line increased steeply and decreased slightly until 1989. Then there was a repeated increase at 23 %. In 1992 they decreased slightly to 17 % where they began to increase moderately.

In 1966 the purple line began at 11 % and it was a subject to steady variations until 1980 when it began to increase constantly to 13 %. During the next nine years the figures fell down slightly to 11 %. After that, the figures went up to 13 %. Over the next seven years the figures decreased slowly to11 %. In 2000 the line rose up again gradually and levelled off.

Summing up, it can be said that in the sixties the poverty rate by adults aged 65 and over was the highest and the rate by adults aged 18 to 64 the lowest. However during the forty years the rate increased and after the period under review it is higher than the line of the adults aged 65. The poverty rate by children aged 17 and under shows a constantly increase and after the period under review this poverty rate is the highest.

TEXT 2:

The bar chart shows the development of the rate of unemployment of children and adults aged 15 to 24 in world regions expressed in percentage points. It is based on figures provided by the Global Employment Trends for Youth. The period under review is the years from 1995 to 2005.

The black bars show the rate of unemployment of the year 1995 whereas the red has object the rate of unemployment of the year 2005.

The Middle East and North Africa were able to decrease the rate from 28.7 % to 25.7%. The rate increased insignificantly in East Europe and the former Soviet republic of 0.3 %. South Africa has a similar development in this domain. There the rate increased of 0.6 %.
In comparison to this, the decrease in Latin America and the Caribbean was of 2.2 % higher. The most shocking development is in South-east Asia and the Pacific. During the time under preview the rate of unemployment increased dramatically from 9.2 % to 15.8 %.
One positive result is given by the industrialised countries being able to reduce the number of unemployed person of 2.1 %.
The figures in South and East Asia are quite similar. Both increased. However the increase was not very considerable. In the South it was 0.1 % and in the East 0.3 %.

Summing up, it can be said that the rate of unemployment increased during the time under preview in the most world regions. Especially the bar of South-east Asia and the Pacific shows a big difference between 1995 and 2005. Although there are the Middle East/North Africa and the industrialised countries, which recorded a positive decrease.

weaver · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 03.03.2006 Beiträge: 2472

was wird denn da beschrieben? schick mal n link zu der grafik.

find auch deine lernstrategie gut.
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Luethien · Junior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 19.04.2007 Beiträge: 80

hab den link oben eingefügt.

wär super, wenn du kurz drüberliest.

lg

weaver · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 03.03.2006 Beiträge: 2472

hier mal paar tipps:

poverty rages

when the reach a peak

fell down slightly kein down

poverty rate by adults < for

der link ließ sich nicht öffnen.

nächstes mal machst du es beser nicht am abend vor dem test sondern am morgen.
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Luethien · Junior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 19.04.2007 Beiträge: 80

danke trotzdem für die hilfe.

lg

Storm891 · Newbie Anmeldungsdatum: 24.02.2008 Beiträge: 2

Hallo zusammen,

bräuchte ganz dringend schnelle Hilfe von euch! Undzwar schreibe ich gleich Morgen eine Englisharbeit und ich habe mal einen Text geschrieben. Kann jemand den schnell mal korrigieren (Grammatik, Ausdruck + Rechtschreibung), damit ich den nachher auswendig lernen kann??

Das wäre super super lieb von euch, wenn ihr mir helfen würdet!! Very Happy

Danke schonmal vorab! Wink

Hier der Text:

"Nowadays violence and crime are big problems in our society. Especially young people are often aggressive and are dominated by their violent urges. The reasons for these problems can be different. But it's often connected with problems in their life such as bad marks at school, poor social care or not enough support from their parents. That's why a lot of youngsters enjoy gangs. There they feel safe and they always have somebody who looks after them. For this people gangs are the same as a family because they always move as a pack. In my opinion parents have to spend more time for their children and educate them in a right way. Furthermore I'm convinced that more sport can be a very good outlet, too."

Beste Grüße

Storm891

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weaver · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 03.03.2006 Beiträge: 2472

Darkness07 · Full Member Anmeldungsdatum: 21.06.2006 Beiträge: 225

Könnte mir das hier mal jemand korrigieren Very Happy

Wäre suoer nett.

The short story ,,Flight‘‘ written by Doris Lessing deals with a man who is commiserate about the fact that his granddaughter Alice wants to marry and in refer to this he is worried about the possibility that he might losing the contact.
The man, who is a fan of pigeons, lives in the house he shared with his daughter and her husband and their four children. His three other granddaughters did already left him. Now, he is worried about the fact that he is going to be left by Alice, who only wants migrate in a nearby house, too.
The short story mainly is about a meeting between him and his doughter in the garden and his reaction, thoughts and feeling afterward and backward to the meeting:

His feelings are very troubled. And in consequence of his problems Alice and his boyfriend present him a pigeon. Thereupon, he sets his pigeons for unnamed reasons free for a flight.

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G'scheid;le · Full Member Anmeldungsdatum: 05.09.2007 Beiträge: 186

"I recommend you the red car."

Or it must be called... (Does 'it must be called' mean 'es muss heißen', yet?)

"I recommend the red car to you."

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"I suggest to you to do your homework."

Or

"I suggest you to do your homework."

Please correct!

G'scheid;le · Full Member Anmeldungsdatum: 05.09.2007 Beiträge: 186

Can nobody correct my last post?

cy1988 · Full Member Anmeldungsdatum: 27.11.2007 Beiträge: 214

hallo...

haben unsere englischklausur zurück bekommen und natürlich muss ich jetzt eine berichtigung schreiben.. ein paar fehler verstehe ich aber nicht

Howard just has another things in his mind which makes clear that he is not interested in Willy's problems and exits.
die zwei wörter, die fett gedruckt sind, adhinter hat meine lehrerin GR (BZ) geschrieben, nur ich weiss nicht wie ich das jetzt korrigieren soll ...

The consequences of this shallow ideals are that he is dependent on Howard and Charly (socially), on Linda and his sons(emotionally).
hier wieder mit GR (Bz) und bei CHARLY wäre ein rechtschreibfehler. ich denke dass es mit dem Charly's zu tun hat, aber kommt das dann nicht auch bei Howard?

wieso ist es ein grammatikfehler wenn ich schreibe : personal success becomes less important in morden society. <<< das "the" sei ein grammatikfehler...
was für eine art von grammatikfehler ist das, wenn ich schreibe NEVER GIVE IT UP, wobei das "it" falsch sei..?!?!

danke im voraus...
grammatikfehler zu beschreiben ist irgendwie kompliziert Smile

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opposites · Junior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 10.03.2008 Beiträge: 60

Iceman 18 · Junior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 23.12.2007 Beiträge: 75

Hi

Eine kurze Frage von mir, muss nach everybody an das Verb auch ein s angehängt werden?

Everybody drives a car.

Mfg Iceman

Zwanglos · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 11.10.2006 Beiträge: 2912 Wohnort: Taipeh

'Everybody' is what is referred to as a collective singular - even though it refers to a large group, it functions grammatically as a singular noun. So, yes, you write 's' at the end.

'Everybody thinks that this explanation was great.'
'Everybody loves Zwanglos'
etc.

Also note:
'Everybody is coming to the party.' (not 'everybody are')

This rule also applies to: everything, everyone, everywhere, anybody, anything, anyone, anywhere, something, etc.
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So on and so fifth...

weaver · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 03.03.2006 Beiträge: 2472

it's like in German:

Jeder im Saal wusste....

Einzahlverb, obwohl 100e im Saal gewesen sein können.
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So sieht Weaver aus

Rixx · Newbie Anmeldungsdatum: 13.08.2006 Beiträge: 7

Hallo!

Ich habe für meine Besondere Lernleistung folgenden Abstract formuliert. Es wäre sehr nett, wenn jemand hier mal drüberlesen könnte.