Sammelthread für Korrekturen

Asuka88 · Newbie Anmeldungsdatum: 24.04.2008 Beiträge: 29

hab mir schon gedacht, dass er kindern geholfen hat und so, aber wollte damit nur sagen, dass das aus dem text ( finde ich) nicht ganz schlüssig hervorgeht, vor allem wenn man selbst kein hintergrundwissen darüber hat.
also wenns ein referat oder so sein soll dann würd ichs nochmal nachgucken alles und verbessern, wenn du es nicht unbedingt brauchst und meinst es ist ok so , dann halt nicht Wink

wenn es um ne wichtige note geht sollte es dir die arbeit schon noch wert sein;)
nochmal zu THEIR/HIS own speed: ja ich weiss schon was du meinst ( ich muss sagen ich bin auch nicht die beste in englisch Wink

) und der satz isfür mich ein rätsel. aber ich glaube wenn due Each student sagt dann heisst es ja JEder student. und dann sagt man im deutschen ja auch: jeder student arbeitet auf seine eigene art und weise/ tempo was auch immer. und ich glaube mal, dass das auch für englisch gilt? aber ich bin mir da jetzt nicht 100 pro sicher, vll weiss ja noch jemand besser darüber bescheid?!
schönen abend noch lg

manni92 · Junior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 13.04.2008 Beiträge: 69

bei mir im buch steht zitat: "Craig Kielburger, 15, founded Free the Children, an organisation that campaigns against chilld larbour, in 1995.
Nach meinen rechnen nach würde er bei mir auch 12 sein, ka warum das das so im buch steht (Meanings in use 1, 1. Auflage, Nachdruck 2007)
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manni92 · Junior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 13.04.2008 Beiträge: 69

Das ist der nächste text den ihr bitte zum kontrollieren versuchts, danke.
es geht um die simpsons machne kennen wahrscheinlich diese folge aus dem fernsehen also wisst ihr gleich ob ich was falsch geschrieben hab.
Ich warne euch wieder es können wieder ziemlich viele fehler sein, aber ich glaub in der grammatik nicht so viele weil darauf habe ich diesmal geachtet, hehehe

One day the Simpson’s had a huge pile of paper and cards in their house because the paper industry founded a new holiday to mad people bought more gifts, wrapping paper and cards.
The heap was growing but nobody wants to take the garbage out. Finally Homer had to do. He went out and at the moment the garbage man was already leaving his house. Homer shouted trash- eating stink bags, suddenly they drove back and hit him and cut of the service. So the trash was piling up. Marge, his wife, wrote an apology to the City Hall and the trash was on the next day away.
First Homer was happy because he thought he beat the City Hall but Marge told him the truth. He ran to the sanitation commissioner and ran for this job. First Homer had no chance to won the campaign for the job of sanitation commissioner but he founded a new slogan: “Cant someone else do it!” So he won the campaign, but he spent the money in a month, what the former commissioner did annually. He had the idea to take the trash in others cities. But one day the trash came out of the earth, and the people didn’t want him anymore. The former commissioner said: “You are screwed!”, and they had to move away.
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manni92 · Junior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 13.04.2008 Beiträge: 69

Ich hoffe nicht ich nerve mit meinen texten aber ich hab halt eine jahresprüfung und will halt so wenig wie möglich fehler haben. (logischerweise Wink

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Es geht hier wieder um die Simpsons doch eher allgemeiner:
The text was about a famous sitcom called "The Simpsons" and which its influence on many people.
The sitcom watched many people in 94 countries, and had won 15Emmys.
The cartoon characters show us many topics of our live for example: bullying, violence on television, families who don’t exactly get on like a house on fire, dysfunctional family members and the materialistic nature of today’s society.
The family was dysfunctional, average and without much power.
We could all recognise some of the characters from our own lives.
Former President George Bush came in the show, and hoped to gain popularity.
The best testimony about "The Simpsons are not dumb" was that the most intelligent people on the globe, Professor Stephen Hawking did a party where everyone had to dress up as a character from the Simpsons.
On many schools the T-shirts with the catchphrase from Bart: "Underachiever and proud of it!" were banned, in case they encourage widespread apathy across the nation.
The same was with Homer's exclamation of "D, OH" when something goes wrong.
We could saw, on the text, that a cartoon sitcom influence many peoples.
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manni92 · Junior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 13.04.2008 Beiträge: 69

DANKE FÜR ALLE DIR MIR DAWEIL GEHOLFEN HABEN ICH FIND DIE SEITE SEHR HILFREICH FÜR MICH Wink

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Asuka88 · Newbie Anmeldungsdatum: 24.04.2008 Beiträge: 29

The text was about a famous sitcom called "The Simpsons" and -- its influence on many people.
The sitcom was watched by many people in 94 countries, and won 15Emmys.
The cartoon characters show us many topics of our live, for example: bullying, violence on television, families who don’t exactly get on like a house on fire, dysfunctional family members and the materialistic nature of today’s society.
The family was dysfunctional, average and without much power.
We could recognize some of the characters from our own lives.
Former President George Bush joined show, hoping to gain popularity.
The best testimony about "The Simpsons are not dumb" was that the most intelligent people on the globe, Professor Stephen Hawking did a party where everyone had to dress up as a character from the Simpsons.
At many schools the T-shirts with the catchphrase from Bart: "Underachiever and proud of it!" were banned, in case they encouraged widespread apathy across the nation.
The same was with Homer's exclamation of "D, OH" when something goes wrong.
We could see, on??? the text, that a cartoon sitcom influences many peoples. besser: The text shows that a cartoon sitcom influences many people.

so würd ich es machen, das heisst aber nicht, dass es 100 pro richtig ist Smile

Pinback · Junior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 04.12.2007 Beiträge: 80

Eine Frage - kann ich so einen Satz starten oder nicht !

Scientist should be alert......of this new technics

Danke

manni92 · Junior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 13.04.2008 Beiträge: 69

jep danke für die hilfe hört sich alles besser an hehehe
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manni92 · Junior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 13.04.2008 Beiträge: 69

der text ist zwar oben eh schon aber ich glaub es hat ihn keiner bemerkt, durch das auch dieser text wichtig ist, bringe ich diesen text wieder als ersters das man ihn wieder lesen kann.
Das ist der nächste text den ihr bitte zum kontrollieren versuchts, danke.
es geht um die simpsons machne kennen wahrscheinlich diese folge aus dem fernsehen also wisst ihr gleich ob ich was falsch geschrieben hab.
Ich warne euch wieder es können wieder ziemlich viele fehler sein, aber ich glaub in der grammatik nicht so viele weil darauf habe ich diesmal geachtet, hehehe

One day the Simpson’s had a huge pile of paper and cards in their house because the paper industry founded a new holiday to mad people bought more gifts, wrapping paper and cards.
The heap was growing but nobody wants to take the garbage out. Finally Homer had to do. He went out and at the moment the garbage man was already leaving his house. Homer shouted trash- eating stink bags, suddenly they drove back and hit him and cut of the service. So the trash was piling up. Marge, his wife, wrote an apology to the City Hall and the trash was on the next day away.
First Homer was happy because he thought he beat the City Hall but Marge told him the truth. He ran to the sanitation commissioner and ran for this job. First Homer had no chance to won the campaign for the job of sanitation commissioner but he founded a new slogan: “Cant someone else do it!” So he won the campaign, but he spent the money in a month, what the former commissioner did annually. He had the idea to take the trash in others cities. But one day the trash came out of the earth, and the people didn’t want him anymore. The former commissioner said: “You are screwed!”, and they had to move away.
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Silverbullet23 · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 22.03.2007 Beiträge: 1641

habs mal kurz überflogen. Hört sich net shclecht an aber eins ist mir aufgefallen

....Finally Homer had to do....

da würde ich .... Finally Homer had to do it
oder ....Finally Homer had to do this

G'scheid;le · Full Member Anmeldungsdatum: 05.09.2007 Beiträge: 186

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"I'm shortly out" oder "I'm shortly away " - "Ich bin kurz weg"

was ist richtig oder drückt man es im Englischen anderst aus?

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Thanks for helping Cool

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Please correct!

Zwanglos · Verfasst am: 01 Aug 2008 - 17:00:39 Titel:

I'm out for a little while.

'I'm shortly out' is grammatically incorrect. It's possible to say 'I'll be out shortly', but that means 'Ich gehe/komme gleich raus'
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So on and so fifth...

lexon · Newbie Anmeldungsdatum: 01.03.2007 Beiträge: 43

kann mir mal einer helfen und einmal durchschauen....hab hier ein kleinen aufsatz geschrieben....danke

Woodstock · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 05.11.2005 Beiträge: 2451

I would live with pleasure in another country, but I do not know yet where it is (would be?) better.
Europe offers many new ways and chances. I think what's very important is to learn different
languages and it is very interesting for me to get experiences with people of other nationalities.
In the future it is very important to speak / know different languages. In other countries it is not easy
to live or work because all countries are various. I would never like to live in Denmark or Ireland
because there is everything very expensive. I could imagine to live or work in Italy, Spain or
in an english-speaking country. Those are wonderful countries, the weather is always great
and the country offers new possibilities and many professional ways. An important reason is,
if one wants to establish a company in Spain or Italy, he can save much money because the taxes are low.
in contrast to Germany one saves many thousand euros a year, and is confronted with less bureaucracy.
Very low life costs offer the countries Poland or Lithuania. All the same in which country they (who?) go,
English is required everywhere because this is the world language.

War jetzt mal so auf den ersten Blick das Grammatikalische.
many - fuer zaehlbare Dinge
much - unzaehlbare Dinge, z. B. eben Geld
Ein Land kann nicht "have" irgendwas, da brauchst du noch ein anderes Verb.
Gruessung
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yukitori · Verfasst am: 08 Sep 2008 - 20:31:29 Titel:

wäre toll, wenn ihr mal drüberlesen würdet...
ich entschuldige mich schon mal für das Ende des Textes,... da war ich nur noch ein unkreatives Wrack.....

Mother abandons baby

The little foundling missed almost nothing: it had warm milk, nappies, a small cap, jacket- only his mum and dad are still absent.
The finding of a three month old baby in the washroom of a Wal-Mart store in Berlin shocked the experts. The agents still puzzle about the backround.

Berlin- It was 5 o`clock pm as a young woman made this exceptionally trove and called directly the police.
“When he was found, the three or four month old boy, named Bob for now, was sleeping peaceful in a child safety seat and now he is in a good condition in hospital”, said the police spokesman Robert Neumann to the press.
“For such a decision there must be pure desperation. Fortunately the mother wanted that the baby keep well, because of the arrangements she made.
Such cases make clear that it is important, that marriage- family-and life advice centres show more and better presence”, he added.
On Monday Bob will get to a foster family, which will visit him on weekend. After eight weeks he comes to an adoptive family, which can adopt him after one year.” For such a case we put on the quite normal child protection standards,” said the youth welfare department leader Mr. Schmidt.
“If the mother announces herself, or is found by the police, she has the chance to get back her son, provided that the external circumstances are protected", said Schmidt.

Woodstock · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 05.11.2005 Beiträge: 2451

Mother abandons baby

The little foundling missed almost nothing: it had warm milk, nappies, a small cap, jacket- only his mum and dad are still absent.
The finding of a three months old baby in the washroom of a Wal-Mart store in Berlin shocked the experts. The agents are still puzzling about the backround. (motivation = beweggrund?)

Berlin- It was 5 o`clock pm when a young woman made this exceptionally trove and directly called the police.
“When he was found, the three or four months old boy, named Bob for now, was sleeping peaceful in a child safety seat and now he is in (a) good condition in hospital”, said the police spokesman Robert Neumann to the press.
“For such a decision there must be pure desperation. Fortunately the mother wanted the baby to be kept ? well, because of the arrangements she made.
Such cases make clear that it is important, that advice centres for marriage, family and life show more and better presence”, he added.
On Monday Bob will get to a foster family, which will visit him on the / next ? weekend. After eight weeks he'll come to an adoptive family, which can adopt him after one year.” For such a case we put on the quite normal child protection standards,” said the youth welfare department leader Mr. Schmidt.
“If the mother announces herself, or is found by the police, she has the chance to get her son back, provided that the external circumstances are protected", said Schmidt.

Nicht uebel!
Was soll der letzte Satz sagen? provided that the external circumstances are protected" - die aeusseren Umstaende sollen was? Das protect klingt etwas seltsam.
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MarvinG · Verfasst am: 11 Sep 2008 - 18:39:41 Titel:

Hallo

Ich wäre sehr dankbar, wenn ihr mir den folgenden Text korrigieren könntet und mir sagen würdet, wenn irgendwas unklar ist. Es geht um Social Networks.

Vielen Dank im Voraus!

We live in an increasingly connected world. Or at least we live in a world where it is now easier to connect with other people. This new generation of communication also spread to the teens. And where you can find a big place of communication? Exactly, in the biggest network of the world, the internet. There is talk of social-networking-sites, like MySpace, Bebo or Facebook. These sites are particularly popular by the teens.

A social-network is a website, which give you a web page that you control. You have got your own profile, where you can fill in your hobbies, school, favorite music, or your favorite school-subject. On most sites, you can upload photos. So you can show your friends, how your actual hairstyle is or how the weather in your last holidays was. You have your own friend list and it’s up to you, who may and can see your page. To join a social-network, you need an e-mail address. You need an invitation for some sites, for example where only students are authorized to join. With social-networking-sites, you stay in contact with your friends all the time and wherever you want to. You can also send messages and discuss about themes in a board. But social-networks aren’t only designed for staying in contact with private friends. You can meet a lot of virtual persons, like Hannah Freeney. She says that she has got 261 people connected to her. Friends, she doesn’t know.

But there isn’t only one positive sight about social-networks. They are also very dangerous. You never know, what really happens with your data and your private pictures. It’s impossible to defend against data abuse, but you never should write your address or phone number online for others to see. Another point is that many teens start to spend too much time to social-networks and become addicted. In most cases, they neglect the education and slight their friends. And it’s very obvious, that too much online contact can isolate you in real life.

All in all, social-networks are very helpful but dangerous. You should never meet people; with those you only had contact with messages. Furthermore you should set your profile so only your friends can see it.
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Woodstock · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 05.11.2005 Beiträge: 2451

We live in an increasingly connected world. Or at least we live in a world where it is now easier to connect with other people. This new generation of communication also spread to the teens. And where can you find a big place of communication? Exactly, in the biggest network of the world, the internet. There is talk of social-networking-sites, like MySpace, Bebo or Facebook. These sites are particularly popular by teens.

A social-network is a website, which gives you a web page that you can control. You have got your own profile, where you can fill in your hobbies, school, favorite music, or your favorite school-subject. On most sites, you can upload photos. So you can show your friends, how your actual (actual = tatsaechlich, aktuell = newest) hairstyle looks like or how the weather in your last holidays was. You have your own friend list and it’s up to you, who may and can see your page. To join a social-network, you need an e-mail address. You need an invitation for some sites, for example for those where only students are authorized to join. With social-networking-sites, you can stay in contact with your friends all the time and wherever you want to. You also can send messages and discuss topics in a board. But social-networks aren’t only designed for staying in contact with private friends. You can meet a lot of virtual persons, like Hannah Freeney. She says that she has got 261 people connected to her. Friends, she doesn’t know.

But there isn’t only a positive sight about social-networks. They also can be very dangerous. You never know, what really happens with your data and your private pictures. It’s impossible to defend against data abuse, but you never should write your address or phone number online for others to see. Another point is that many teens start to spend too much time to social-networks and become addicted to it. In most cases, they neglect the education and slight their friends. And it’s very obvious, that too much online contact can isolate you from real life.

All in all, social-networks can be very helpful but also dangerous. You should never meet people with which you only had contact with messages. Furthermore you should set your profile in a way that only your friends can see it.

Pretty well done!
Nur letzte Satz: "Friends, she doesn’t know": Kennt sie keine Freunde, oder weiss sie nicht, ob sie welche hat?
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MarvinG · Verfasst am: 11 Sep 2008 - 19:37:15 Titel:

Ich wollte damit ausdrücken "Freunde, die sie nicht (persönlich) kennt.

Danke für deine Korrektur Very Happy

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StR-Tobi · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 10.08.2006 Beiträge: 2664

Korrekturvorschläge zur Korrektur ohne Gewähr:

"These sites are particularly popular by teens." -> among teens
"or how the weather in your last holidays was." -> mE böse deutsche satzstellung! -> how the weather was in your last holidays.
"spend too much time to social-networks" -> time on

Ferner ist die Kommasetzung nicht überall richtig, z.B. kommt nach Furthermore eins. Bin da aber auch unsicher, um zu korrigieren.

Bellis · Verfasst am: 12 Sep 2008 - 09:22:50 Titel:

Tobi, Deine Korrekturen sind i.O.

Ich möchte noch eines anmerken:

Relativpronomen für Personen sind niemals "which"

You should never meet people who you are only in contact with by messages
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Bellis · Verfasst am: 12 Sep 2008 - 12:49:10 Titel:

Some additional corrections to " Mother Abandons Baby"

A three month-old baby / -> the baby is three months old

The agents are still puzzling about the background (or : facts about it)

Achtung: Adjektiv --> Adverb :

A young woman made an exceptional Wink

trove
The baby was sleeping peacefully Wink

... the mother wanted the baby to be well..

... a family, who will visit him at ! the weekend

... provided (that) the external circumstances permit this

"...", said (-) police spokesman Robert Neuman
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dennis7047 · Junior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 11.09.2007 Beiträge: 63

kann das al jemand übefliegen bitte? Daaaaanke

London

My text is about London, the capital of England.
London is one of the famous cities in the world and was created 43 after Christ by the Romans.
London is a very big and a very expensive city. It’s so big, which gives it to 20000 taxis. Today it has more than 7.1 million inhabitants, and more than twenty-five million Tourist visit London every year. The tourists spend each year 10 billion Euros in London.

In London can you see there many wonderful sights. Here a few of these sights:

Big Ben: The Big Ben is the monument of London. The bell weighs thirteen a half tons; it's the largest bell all over the world. Big Ben hangs in a tower which is 97 meters high.

Tower of London: The Tower of London was built in the 11th Century and is an old fortress, in which today the Crown Jewels are kept. The Tower is in the city centre on the bank of the Themse. At first the Tower was used as a castle for kings. About 300 years later it was started as one of the most famous prisons. Today it is a museum.

Buckingham Palace: The Buckingham Palace is a wonderful and beautiful building, where the Queen living. It has 600 areas. You can visit Buckingham Palace only from August till November, because on this time the Queen is in vacation.

Madame Tussauds: Madam Tussauds is the famous waxworks started by Madame Tussauds in 1835 which is now one of the most popular tourist attractions in London with over two million visitors a year. It has over 300 wax figures. Represented are Famous people.

Zwanglos · Verfasst am: 14 Sep 2008 - 16:49:40 Titel:

dennis7047 · Junior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 11.09.2007 Beiträge: 63

Vielen dank Zwanglos.

MarvinG · Verfasst am: 23 Sep 2008 - 19:28:28 Titel:

An Interview with Larry Sanger, the incorporator of Wikipedia.

The internet is very helpful. You can find all there. You can buy anything you want, watch your favorite TV shows if you missed them or you can look, how the weather will be in the next 14 days. These are helpful applications. But the biggest advantage is to find all information you need. Be it for presentations or for private use. You can find all in the internet or rather onto Wikipedia. But is it really an advantage? This is an interview with Larry Sanger, the incorporator of Wikipedia. He will say something about Wikipedia and reliable information.

How did you come in this idea, to create Wikipedia?

With Wikipedia, we want to appropriate a place, where people can find information, for their are looking for. In our world, nobody wants to go to a library if he wants to know, how many legs a grasshopper has got. You can find it onto Wikipedia.

But isn’t it very difficult to write articles in the minutest details?
No, it isn’t. The sense of Wikipedia is that everybody can write articles about everything. So the users create their own community. And the knowledge comes from everyone.

But if all people can write articles, there are definitely many mistakes in the articles, which spread fast to others.

Yes that’s right. Onto Wikipedia are many mistakes and we can’t trust every author. But we’re trying to correct all mistakes, but that’s how you can imagine, very difficult by this huge variety of data material.

Than it is, how you say, Wikipedia in charge of for most wrong information on the World Wide Web?

No. Wikipedia is only a site, where people can find information. That they are sometimes wrong should be clear for everybody.

Which hints do you can give the readers, if they are looking for information?

If you read an article onto Wikipedia or onto another website and you need them for a presentation, you should always look, if you can try the source, because all articles onto information-websites come on Wikipedia together to one point. Then you should look for the same information on other sites and compare them. Then you can do nothing wrong.

Thank you for this interview.

Danke für die Korrektur Smile

Marvin
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Woodstock · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 05.11.2005 Beiträge: 2451

An Interview with Larry Sanger, the incorporator of Wikipedia.

The internet is very helpful. You can find everything there. You can buy anything you want, watch your favorite TV shows if you missed them or you can look(,) what the weather will be like in the next 14 days. These are helpful applications. But the biggest advantage is to find all information you need. If for presentations or for private use. You can find everything in the internet or rather on Wikipedia. But is it really an advantage? This is an interview with Larry Sanger, the incorporator of Wikipedia. He will say (better: tell us) something about Wikipedia and reliable information.

How did you come to this idea, to create Wikipedia?

With Wikipedia, we want to appropriate a place, where people can find information, for which they are looking. In our world, nobody wants to go to a library if he wants to know(,) how many legs a grasshopper has got. You can find it on Wikipedia.

But isn’t it very difficult to write articles in the minutest details?
No, it isn’t. The purpose (sense = sinn wie fuehlen etc) of Wikipedia is that everybody can write articles about everything. So the users create their own community. And the knowledge comes from everyone.

But if all people can write articles, there are definitely many mistakes in the articles, which spread fast to others.

Yes that’s right. On Wikipedia there are many mistakes and we can’t trust every author. But we’re trying to correct all mistakes, but that’s, how you can imagine, very difficult with this huge variety (haette gesagt: amount) of data material.

Then is, how you said, Wikipedia in charge for most wrong information on the World Wide Web?

No. Wikipedia is only a site, where people can find information. That they are sometimes wrong should be clear for everybody.

Which hints can you give the readers if they are looking for information?

If you read an article on Wikipedia or another website and you need them (eher: the information) for a presentation, you should always make sure, if you can trust the source, because all articles on information-websites come on Wikipedia together to one point. Then you should look for the same information on other sites and compare them. Then you can't do anything wrong.

Thank you for this interview.
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MarvinG · Verfasst am: 23 Sep 2008 - 20:23:41 Titel:

Thank you very much Very Happy

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Clive · Junior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 29.09.2008 Beiträge: 54

Wäre wirklich nett=)

The luckiest thing that ever happened to me was for three years.
I played in the soccerteam in the reserve. It was my fist game that i played in this liga. It was a rainy day an i was really motivated.
After 45 minutes the game was drawn.
It was a boring game an then after 85 minutes i got the ball and ran over the hole field an shot a goal. So we won the match 1: 0 an i was so lucky and happy.
My team was really proud at me. This was my luckiest thing that ever happened to me.

The most unusual thing i have ever eaten was a jellyfish.
I was with my friend in and we went to the interspar in the passage. My neighbour work there. And we went to him an my friend saw a jellyfish in the multideck cabinet.
So i bought it and had to eat it. It looked really horrible but i taste it.
One bite was enough and i felt so terrible. So i never eat sea animals again.
This was the unusual thing i have ever eaten.

Woodstock · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 05.11.2005 Beiträge: 2451

The luckiest thing that has ever happened to me was (occured) three years ago.
I played in the soccerteam in the reserve. It was the fist game () I played in this league. It was a rainy day and I was really motivated.
After 45 minutes the game was a draw.
It was a boring game and then after 85 minutes i got the ball, ran over the hole field an scored a goal. So we won the match 1: 0 and I was so lucky and happy.
My team was really proud of me. This was the luckiest thing that has ever happened to me.

The most unusual thing i have ever eaten was a jellyfish.
I was with my friend in (in wo?) and we went to the interspar in the passage. My neighbour worked there. And we went to him and my friend saw a jellyfish in the multideck cabinet.
So i bought it and had to eat it. It looked really horrible but i tasted it anyway.
One bite was enough and i felt so terrible. So i have never eaten sea animals again.
This was the most unusual thing i have ever eaten.

So auf den ersten Blick.
I -> immer capitals
und = anD (typo oder Absicht?) Wink

whenever "ever" -> present perfect "I have ever done", I have never eaten ... again"
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Clive · Junior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 29.09.2008 Beiträge: 54

Vielen Vielen Dank!
immer capitals ? was heißt das?

Woodstock · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 05.11.2005 Beiträge: 2451

gross geschrieben. Wink

I statt i, auch wenns nicht am Satzanfang steht, sondern im Satz.
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Helpless305 · Newbie Anmeldungsdatum: 16.09.2008 Beiträge: 13

Hi Leutz sollte zu folgender Frage folgenden Text schreiben! Könntet ihr ihn mal überfliegen und gucken ob ich irgendwo fehler habe bin nähmlich nicht wirklich ein AS in der Sprache! Bedanke mich schon mal in Vorraus!

Comment: Write about one of the following topic:
Do you agree with the ideas expressed in lines 10-13 ("Regular and consistent support is important to all young people involved in competive situations, and public exams are no exception. It is merely desirable but essential that young students have a settled domestic background, including a quiet room for studying, with understanding parental backing?)

Deutsch: Stimmen mit den Ideen überein, die in Linien 10-13 ausgedrückt sind ("Regelmäßige und konsequente Unterstützung ist für alle jungen Leute wichtig, die an stressigen Situationen beteiligt sind, und öffentliche Prüfungen sind keine Ausnahme. Es ist bloß wünschenswert, aber notwendig, dass junge Studenten einen geregelten, häuslichen Verhältnis leben, einschließlich eines ruhigen Zimmers für das Studieren, mit dem Verstehen elterlicher Unterstützung.

1. Today many young people have one big problem.They get no help by problems or have no room where they can learn undisturbed. Their parents have no time for them and put their children under pressure. However the young generation need a regular and consistent support of their parents and no more pressure, but they need a settled domestic background and a quiet room for studing, too.
I agree with the ideas expressed in line 10-13 because I am a young people, too.
I also need the support of my parents if they were not at my side, I would have many problems at school. Let me give you an example. A young girl has a family and her parents work all the time. She is alone all the day. She has for studying a quit room, but what should she do if she has a problem with her homework? Her mother and her father can´t help her.
So she goes to school and get a bad mark for her homework. If she goes home and shows the mark her parents, they grumble about this bad result. The result of this is that their daughter stand even more under pressure. I think if they have helped her, the mark were satisfactory and their child has less stress. So the parents must have more understanding and more time for their children.
An other fact is that the most of the students have no quiet room for studying or need someone. I agree with this aspekt but the young generation need not necessarily a own room for learning because there are a lot chances for studying out of home.
Take for example the library. Pupils can go to this place if they have to learn or do their homework. In addtion there are other places, for instance the school after school is a great stay for quit learning, too.
An other piont is that young girls and boys need a setteld domestic background.
I think this fact is the most important one. If young people like me have a settled domestic background, they live almost without stress and pressure. It is because then they have the support of the parents and they know if they did one mistake their parents understanding them. But the children should not think that they can do always mistakes. It have to give some rules in the family which should make the schoollife easier.
All in all if it gives a settled familylife where the parents understanding their children and their problems, the young generation would be more relaxed and would have a better schoollife without stress and fear for exams.

Bellis · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 02.04.2008 Beiträge: 1543 Wohnort: NRW

Today, many young people have a big problem. They do not get any help with their problems, or do not have a room where they can learn without being disturbed.Their parents do not have time ...
However, the young generation needs regular and consistent support by their parents ... -studying
I agree with ... in the lines 10-13 because I am a young person , too.(people -- nur im Plural)
I, too, need my parents' support for ...
She has a quiet room to study in, but what can she do if ....
So she goes to school and gets...
If she ... and shows the mark to her parents they will grumble...
The result (--) is that their daughter is even more under pressure.
I think, if they had helped her the mark would have been satisfying, and their child would not feel under stress so much.
So, it is important that the parents have more understanding and more time for their children.
Another fact is that most of the students do not have a quiet room (--)
I agree to this aspect, but the young generation does not necessarily need a room for their own to learn, because there are a lot of opportunities of studying outside.
Take the library, for example.
...
If young people ... they can live ...
It is because then they have their parents' support and they know that if they made any mistake their parents would understand them.

There have to be some rules in the family to make life easier.
All in all, if there is a settled family life where parents understand their children and their problems the young generation will be more relaxed and will have better schooldays without stress and fear of exams.
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noobynoob · Newbie Anmeldungsdatum: 04.10.2008 Beiträge: 13

salut. sollte als Klausur-Übung ne Analyse schreiben. thema der klausur ist halt Poem analysis. beim vorliegenden text handelt es sich um einen Songtext aus den 60ern.
Bitte um verbesserungsvorschläge=)
thx=)

The song “Dead End Street” written by The Kinks in 1966 is a protest song blaming the system for the society that doesn’t accept the lower or second class.
The song is divided into two verses with two bridges and a chorus.
The first stanza is the introduction and is about a person that is speaking about a flat which is a little bit shabby. The person is out of work and has no money.
The second stanza is a bridge that describes the flat a little more. In this stanza you also recognise that the speaker doesn’t only sing about himself but about “we(…)”(l.9).
The chorus does really help to express the content of the song. It is about not being recognised by people of the higher class and not seeing any future.
The speakers seem to be in the second class and can’t get out of there.
The second verse describes their sad life a little more because it says that they have no money for heat their flat.
The second bridge tells the reader that there are two persons singing: “we both want to work so hard”(l.23).
It stresses the fact that they have no chance “(…) to emigrate(…)”(l.21) into the “normal” society although they would work quite hard. They’re very unsatisfied with their situation.
Reasons for the fact that this two “bridges” are real bridges are for example the text. The two bridges start with the same texts. The end of the bridge is a summary and an appeal of the verse before.
The chorus does also stress their situation that they were born into this society and they also will die there because they have no chance to get up.
The introduction introduces the problem to the (reader)/listener. The person that is talking would like to have a normal, save and worm flat but he only has one with “(…) a crack up in the ceiling”(l.1). He wishes for a good Sunday joint but his is just made of bread and honey.
In this stanza there are not many stylistic devices. The stanza that is made of 4 lines just has two end rhymes. So it is divided into a a b b.
The bridge that is following the introduction describes the that a little bit more. And it lets you recognise that the speaker is not just one person.
The chorus does always start with “Dead end”(e.g. l.11). This stresses the position the speakers are in. They are born into the second class, have to live there and probably die there. They want to express that ding is the only way to get out of this class. This is stressed in the video they made for the song. (see on youtube.com)
The second verse describes the bad conditions they have to handle with. “My feet are nearly frozen”(l.17), could mean that the conditions are that horrible that one of the speaker is nearly ready to die.
In the second bridge there is said that one of the speaker is “(…) deep in debt and” that “it’s now much too late”(l. 20).
So, he has debts because he lived with not much money and couldn’t stay alive without making debts.
He is chanceless concerning emigrate into the “normal society”.
The song shows a special connection. There aren’t many stylistic devices in it but there is a red line that goes through the text. In every first to forth line in every stanza there are two end rhymes. They are always separated in a “a a b b” scheme.
The situation of the speakers is very hard but typical for this time where it was written. You were born into a special society and could not move up into a higher class, even if you work harder than the people in the upper class do.
The song is written quite clear. The content and the appeal it has is quickly to understand I think.

susi.sunshine · Newbie Anmeldungsdatum: 06.10.2008 Beiträge: 2

Bitte um Korrektur, muß einen Essay schreiben. Very Happy

In the following I would like to give some informations about Australia. Australia, with an area of 4,9 million square miles, is the largest island and the smallest continent on Earth. It reaches 2300 miles from its most northern to its most southern point, and about 2500 miles from east to west. Australia got a population of sixteen million people, about 88 percent of them living in towns or cities. The largest city in Australia is Sydney, 4,2 million people live in this town. Canberra is the capital of Australia. Most of Australia is outback and much of this area is empty desert. But in parts with enough water there are huge sheep, cattle and wheat ranches, which the Australian`s call stations. Australia produces 30 percent of the world woal and is a big exporter of beef lamb and wheat. Planes and helicopters play a big role in the bush. There are used to round up cattle, to give medical help and even for the errands. In Australia you can find such exotic animals, for example a koala bears, wombats, snakes, lizards, crocodiles and the mysterious Tasmanian tiger. Australia has lots of different tourist attraction`s. For example The Great Barrier Rief, it is one of the natural wonders in the world. This is the largest living organism in the world. About 350 species of corals which give the reef the colour. Another touristic attraction is the Ayers Rock, within a big red waterless desert. It is the largest sandstone monolith in the world. In conclusion Australia is a wonderful land with exotic animals and beautiful tourist attraction`s.

Caro** · Junior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 02.09.2008 Beiträge: 65

Es wäre gaaanz toll wenn mir das hier noch jemand heute Abend korrigieren könnte:

The first important element that shows the social criticism is the title of the story.
“I See You Never” cause for the reader directly the effect of finality. It seems like something that nobody can change. The title saddens the reader.
If I try to analyse the title after reading the story, I think it should show, that the situation for illegal immigrants is hopeless in America. If the government discover them, they have no chance to stay in America. They have to go back where they come from, independently of the facts that they have friends, a job etc. in America.

“I see you never” is one of the sentence Mr. Ramirez repeat often, during he talks to Mr. O’Brian. It seems very hard for him to accept it. However Mr. O’Brian realise that much later.
She realise that she will never see him again, when he is gone. Maybe she doesn’t even thing about it before. But I am sure that Mr. Ramirez did it very often while he was living in her rooming house. Surely he had imagine how it would be to leave America forever before.

I think another very important element that shows the social criticism in this story is the behaviour of the two police officers.
During the whole story, there is no moment when they show respect to Mr. Ramirez. They don’t deal with him violent, but there are some situations, when the two men seem arrogant and contumelious.
If the two officers would be respectful toward Mr. Ramirez, they would have respect his privacy. I’m sure it would be nicer if they let him alone when he talks to Mrs. O’Brian.
Maybe it is a normal situation for the police to deport illegal immigrants. I think they cannot imagine how difficult and bad this situation is for a person concerned.

This aspect of irreverence is shown very well in line 3 until line 6. Mr. Ramirez starts crying because he doesn’t want to go back to Mexico. The situation is sad and depressed. The police don’t show commiseration or ignore this atmosphere. They smile about it.

This aspect is definitely social criticism, because the American police don’t even try to understand the hard situation when illegal immigrants find out, that they will never see their new friends etc. again.

Ganz vielen Dank Very Happy

Woodstock · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 05.11.2005 Beiträge: 2451

Woodstock · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 05.11.2005 Beiträge: 2451

susi.sunshine · Newbie Anmeldungsdatum: 06.10.2008 Beiträge: 2

Danke für die schnelle Bearbeitung. Very Happy

chibi_shizuka · Newbie Anmeldungsdatum: 20.10.2007 Beiträge: 30 Wohnort: berlin

hallo ich bin total bescheuert wenn es um englisch geht und wir müssen ein summary schreiben. Ich habs versucht aber bei mir stimmt die Zeitform hinten und vorne nicht.

Der Text

Mein Summary:

The excerpt from the book “About a Boy” is about Will, he is a 36 years old man. In the scene Will is in a coffee shop and meets the woman, who he thinks to know, but she doesn´t recognize him. It´s not the same woman, but he opens a conversation but she doesn´t know what he is talking about. Will is embarrassed and she is confused. Will´s Mistake is embarrassing, but she relaxed and started to smile and she is looking at him. After a while Will starts a new conversation to her and later he gets her phone number and a date with her. When the met again she told him about her children and he is shocked.

bitte net schlagen bin wirklich so schlecht Sad

hoffe ihr könnte mir helfen

aziza · Newbie Anmeldungsdatum: 13.10.2008 Beiträge: 4

BITTE UM KORREKTUR...
Ist eine Einleitung meines Vortrages

I have had a long time till I found finally something special. Every day I took the newspaper and looked for a current topic and every single day the financial crisis was reported. First I considered to hold a talk about it but nevertheless I decided differently, because the topic is too complicated. All the same I think
this crisis will be also past any times, I hope so... I continued to leaf through the newspaper and BINGO that’s it. Have you any ideas what I mean… I give you an hint, it appears each day in the newspaper sometimes it’s correct however mostly it is completely wrong…

Clive · Junior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 29.09.2008 Beiträge: 54

Currently my favourite thing is my new laptop I got it for nearly two month.
I got it because we need it in the school. It coast 1300€ and it is a dell.
It is very comfortable when I can go everywhere I want and when I can use the internet in my
room.
It can write, play, listening to music and watch films on it, this is very applicatory when I lay in the bed and can watch a dvd.
My laptop is nearly the best at this price class.
This was a short description of my favourite thing.

Danke

Clive · Junior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 29.09.2008 Beiträge: 54

findet sich keiner der das kurz korrigieren kann?

Woodstock · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 05.11.2005 Beiträge: 2451

Nur keine Hektik. Wink

Mantia · Newbie Anmeldungsdatum: 21.10.2008 Beiträge: 2

This text describes the life story of a man who rises from a bodybuilder to a Governor. His name is Arnold Schwarzenegger. And today he is one of the most famous person all over the world. Moreover he is the only one who has realized the American dream. The life of this man is amazing, but true. He recognized early what he wants to be, that is to say the best bodybuilder in the world. Unlike the other people, who think that America was only a country, which everybody can have a good life, regardless of their ability and achievement. (da passt keine connectors rein....)
He works very hard for his body-building and education. And that is the reason, why he gets the power of the governor and so many successes.

Woodstock · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 05.11.2005 Beiträge: 2451

This text describes the life story of a man who rose from a bodybuilder to a Governor. His name is Arnold Schwarzenegger. And today he is one of the most famous persons all over the world. Moreover, he is the only one who has realized the American dream. The life of this man is amazing, but true. He recognized early what he wanted to be [that is to say (wuerd ich rausnehmen)] the best bodybuilder in the world. Unlike () other people, who think that America is only a country, where everybody can have a good life, regardless of their ability and achievement. (da passt keine connectors rein....)
He has worked very hard for his bodybuilding and education. And that is the reason () why he has gotten the power of the governorship and so much success.

haett ich mal gesagt.
Gruss
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StR-Tobi · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 10.08.2006 Beiträge: 2664

"You know you've studying abroad in the UK for a while when..."

Ich dachte zuerst das wäre falsch, aber eine Google-Suche nach "you've studying" befördert mich in den dreistelligen Fundbereich. Was ist das für eine Zeit!? Fehlt da nicht ein "been"?

Bellis · Senior Member Anmeldungsdatum: 02.04.2008 Beiträge: 1543 Wohnort: NRW

Die Zeit gibt es wirklich nicht, es liegt nur eine Auslassung von -been- vor.

Hast du dir die Google-Ergebnisse genau angesehen?
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Schwarzes Smartie · Verfasst am: 26 Jan 2009 - 20:46:12 Titel:

Ich brauche dringend Hilfe und wäre sehr froh, wenn sich jemand die Zeit nimmt...Habe einige Wörter nachgeschlagen und bin mir jetzt nicht sicher, ob sie richtig verwendet sind usw... Vielen Dank für Hilfe! Very Happy

The Virgin Suicides

Study Question: The word „suicide“ is mentioned in the book’s title, and Mary’s death is the subject of the first sentence. What is the effect of this narrative structure on the novel? How does it influence the reader’s perception of events?

The deaths of the Lisbon girls are announced in the book’s title and first sentence, so it becomes clear that the girls’ suicides are the main theme rather than the boys struggle to cope with them.

Another effect is that the reader is warned in advance. He is left waiting for the suicide to happen. At the dance Lux, Mary, Bonnie and Therese seem to be healthy and normal, and the reader is given the impression that they really get over their loss as they start the therapy in chapter 3. Nevertheless the readers has accepted in the beginning that the girls are „doomed“ to kill themselves as well. There are many evidences in the novel that support this impression and that influences the reader’s interpretation of the girls’ action. At the Homecoming dance Mary says: „I’m having the best time of my life“ (p.132), which sounds creepy in the wake of the readers knowledge about her following suicide. The decay of the Lisbon house which is described very detailed also reminds us that the Lisbons’ lives do not ease off.

The author wants the reader to comprend how the neighborhood behaves, since the fatalistic attitude the reader develops parallels that of the Lisbons neighborhood. Of course it is wrong to see the suicides as tragedys that could not have been stopped, however you need to understand the feeling before you can give a judgement.
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