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BeitragVerfasst am: 20 Okt 2007 - 17:51:14    Titel: Köntte jmd bitte kurz Korrekturlesen machen?

Diesmal hab ich mir sehr viel Mühe gegebn,also macht mich bitte nicht so fertig das alles falsch ist, ich weiss ich bin ein Loser in Englisch!!
Deshalb bitte ich um eure Hilfe!!! Razz





Eunice

Eunice is one of the womans who live in New Orleans in a street which is named Elysian Fields (p.4).
She is Stella's neighbor and occupies the flat upstairs.
Eunice is a woman, who always wants to know everything, what you can see in the part she is talking to Blanche.


Stanley

Satnley is Stella's husband he is a Polack and is about twenty eight years ols, he also lives in New Orleans.
He is dressed in a roughly way (p.10,l.4) has a medium beight and is strongly and compactly built (p.19, l.33), he has a rough humor and his hobbies are bowling,poker and to meet up with his friends. He is a Master Sergeant in the Engineers' Corps (p.17,l.1). And how Blanche said, he is everything else as his wife Stella.

Stella

Stella is a young gentle woman of about 25 years (p.10, l.12), but with the years she put on some weight (p.15, l.5).
She is very quiet and peaceful (p.15, l.20) , also a little bit shy(p.14, l.22) and sensitive "Oh Stella, Stella you are crying!" (p.19, l.Cool. Her incidense also seems to be decent, like you can see in line 11 on page 14, when she exculpates for her bad conditions.
Maybe she is also a little bit jealous of her big sister " It's just increadible, Blanche, how well you're looking" (p.15, l.29).
She lives with her husband in a small flat with just two rooms and a bathroom (p.15, l.16).
As her dad died she left her family and let Blanche alone with their family property and all the funerals, and now as Blanche lost their family property she reproaches her of losing Belle Reve (p.17, l.29).
She is a person who runs away from problems and stars a new life with new important people around her.

Blanche

Blanche is the converse of her sister Stella. She is very well looking(p.15, l.29) and is dressed in a dressy way with a necklase and earrings of pearl (p.10, l.37).
She is about 30 years and lives in Mississippi where she is an english teacher in a school.
As Blanche was younger she was married with a boy, who sadly died.
As she came in in Stella's flat she is very suprised about the conditions Stella lives with (p.14, l.10).
Blanche stayed at Belle reve, while Stella went away, she tried to hold it together but it does not work "I stayed and fought for it, bled for it, almost died for it!"(p.17,l.3Cool. And as her parents died she had to sell the Bell Reve for paying her parents' funerals, and now her sister is angry with her.
Blanche is a struggler she disputes with the problems and tries everything to dissolv them.
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BeitragVerfasst am: 20 Okt 2007 - 18:28:17    Titel:

Eunice

Eunice is one of the women who lives in New Orleans in a street named Elysian Fields (p.4).
She is Stella's neighbor and occupies the flat upstairs.
Eunice is a woman, who always wants to know everything, which is something you can see in the part of the story in which she is talking to Blanche.


Stanley

Stanley is Stella's husband. He is Polish and is about twenty eight years old, he also lives in New Orleans.

>> CAREFUL: 'Polack' is a derogatory term which Polish people will probably find very offensive. Just say 'he is Polish' <<

He is dressed in a roughly way (p.10,l.4) has a medium beight and is strongly and compactly built (p.19, l.33), he has a rough humor and his hobbies are bowling,poker and to meet up with his friends. He is a Master Sergeant in the Engineers' Corps (p.17,l.1). And how Blanche said, he is everything else as his wife Stella.

Stella

Stella is a young gentle woman of about 25 years (p.10, l.12), but with the years she put on some weight (p.15, l.5).
She is very quiet and peaceful (p.15, l.20) , also a little bit shy(p.14, l.22) and sensitive "Oh Stella, Stella you are crying!" (p.19, l.Cool. Her incidense

^^ das ist kein Wort ... insistence? innocence? incandescence?

also seems to be decent, like you can see in line 11 on page 14, when she exculpates for her bad conditions.

exculpates? I'm not ever sure what that means ...

Maybe she is also a little bit jealous of her big sister " It's just incredible, Blanche, how well you're looking" (p.15, l.29).
She lives with her husband in a small flat with just two rooms and a bathroom (p.15, l.16).
After her dad died she left her family and let Blanche alone with their family property and all the funerals, and now as Blanche lost their family property she reproaches her of losing Belle Reve (p.17, l.29).
She is a person who runs away from problems and starts a new life with new important people around her.

Blanche

Blanche is the OPPOSITE of her sister Stella. She is very well looking(p.15, l.29) and is dressed in a dressy way with a necklace and earrings of pearl (p.10, l.37).
She is about 30 years old and lives in Mississippi where she is an English teacher in a school.
WHEN Blanche was younger she was married TO a boy, who sadly died.
As she came inTO Stella's flat she is very surprised about the conditions IN WHICH Stella lives (p.14, l.10).
Blanche stayed at Belle reve while Stella went away, AND she tried to hold it together but it DIDN'T work OUT. "I stayed and fought for it, bled for it, almost died for it!"(p.17,l.3Cool. And AFTER her parents died she had to sell the Bell Reve TO PAY FOR her parents' funerals, and now her sister is angry AT her.
Blanche is a struggler. She FACES a lot of problems and tries everything THAT SHE CAN TO SOLVE them.




Really now, I think you're relying on a dictionary too much here ... there are far too many fancy words that you're using incorrectly. Just write with what you know! Only look up a new word if its absolutely necessary, otherwise you'll be in over your head.
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BeitragVerfasst am: 21 Okt 2007 - 00:37:56    Titel:

exculpates means rechtfertigen...

And thankyou very much for your correction, but i have to say that i really just use the dictionary when it's necessary...i'm really no good english writer Embarassed
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