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BeitragVerfasst am: 01 Jun 2009 - 18:25:46    Titel: Korrektur dieses Textes

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Introduction

Our modern world is full of techniques and machines. To these belong computer which have become essential and really important in business and private life.. Actually a robot is also a computer and we even use more of them. It is not only a fiction made up by film productions. Imagine you wouldn't have a dishwasher – the same for a company that wouldn't have robotic machines for their production. They really do ease everybody's life. But is it really so or are they a danger or even a doom? First, I will give a little overview about how things have developed in the past centuries. After that, we will see where robots have brought and are going to bring us in the future as well as what we have to consider.

Definition

A robot is a stationary or mobile machine which can perform tasks according to a certain program. The term “Robot” has its source in the Czech language and means labour or forced labour. Today its meaning has changed. We combine this term with a machine that looks like and is able to perform tasks a usual being can.

Development

Robotic machines yet were known in the ancient world. One found recordings of a decimal system 6000BC already. It's the base for the entire informatics. Later, Chinese had built a compass which allowed to pass and research the desert Gobi. Many steps and years later, in 725AD, it was also the Chinese to invent the first fully mechanic clock. A great jump to the real robotics was an innovation of Leonardo Da Vinci. In the 15th century he built a humanoid robot that looked like a soldier and was able to move some parts of his body.
The first definitely documented robot then was shown in 1737. Mr. Vaucanson had built a mechanic musician as well as a mechanic duck which could perform some real duck's tasks and was really close to one. An automate which could be really useful, first was a calculating machine built by Charles Babbage in 1834. This machine which was based on the idea of the loom could perform complicated operations. Some years later „Boilerplate“ appeared. He was a mechanic man to solve conflicts between nations. Unfortunately this great invention remained unknown for most people. Now a little jump in time to the 1st modern computer: It yet contained all components of a computer. Its name was „Z1“, named by Konrad Zuse in 1935. It's not only the computers which experienced a boom. It was also the humanoids. For example in 1940 an electrical robot was published which could go, smoke, count and some more.
However, that's not the actual innovation. In 1958 something began that was so to speak an important step for mankind. With probes going into space the unmanned aerospace started. A decade later the research in things of robotics was accelerated. In the 1970's countless new innovations appeared. These were for example some new humanoid robots, language analysing programs, the first scientific calculator and the first robotic vehicle. These days we have not only robots for our personal use rather we have them for pleasure and entertainment. There are even robotic competitions like robots playing football while being able to learn and play intelligent. Others can perform human tasks like go, climb or balance. The newest generation unites all aspects in one. Robots can go, speak as well as they can interact and stand up if they have fallen down.
Over those years robots have developed more and more from a simple machine to a complex humanoid and will probably continue this way, every time closer to a human being. From the simplest mechanic machine to a computer that offers new possibilities in the daily life. Internet, television, mobile phones are things besides the robots which help us to get information quickly and easily wherever we are.


Advantages & Disadvantages

Good or bad - useful or useless? This is a question we often put on ourselves no matter if it makes sense or not. We do this for robotics as well. It definitely has an enormous benefit but also holds problems and dangers. Therefore it is important to list all of them and conclude carefully. The most obvious advantage is the easy of life which bring us the robots. We have many of them in our households already. Think of a dishwasher, a washing machine, the coffee dispenser or last but not least the personal computer. They are part of our lives and are indispensable. Not only at home we have robots. Mainly in companies' factories. They allow a cheap and quick production, most of all in mass production. Almost nothing is handmade only today. Foods, vehicles, electrical products as well as cosmetic articles are produced with automatically working machines. It's to mention that it is necessary for the human demand these days. Another really important fact is that they can perform tasks which are dangerous for humans. They can go through fire or hard reachable areas while a man has no chance to get there easily. In this way they can rescue people or research, like for example in space where we almost use robots only to get our information. We have many different possibilities through the innovation of robots, so to speak. Technical progress combined with an ease of life and a solution for episodes are thus the robots' advantages.
While we enjoy our robots we have to consider that they bring problems with them, too. One of these problems goes in coincidence with the ease of life. It makes ourselves even lazier and more comfortable. Only putting the dishes into the dishwasher or ordering food via telephone or internet means an ease of work, time saving, which we usually don't take advantage of. We sit in front of our TV or PC and eat crisps or chocolate. In the economy we have another problem. The facilitation in production caused by robots brings competition with it. More machines means less work for employees and consequently unemployment. Another danger is a really prospective one, though not impossible. Robots get even closer to human beings but do not have human feelings. It it gets that far that they can replace a human life they will be a danger. Will the become intelligent enough to rebel against mankind or will they be more valuable for us than our old friends are...

Foresight

Robots will affect our future. But in which way will they do? After listing the advantages and disadvantages – how is it going to continue? They probably will widen their influence in production and will take the work in our household, they may be good for research and for the rescue of people. They will more and more take human tasks. But what can this cause? Many Science-Fiction films already show it: Robots as warriors, as soldiers in a robotic army. Will we decide our wars in the technical state of our robots. Sure this could mean that no one will be hurt anymore but could also mean that robots fight against human beings while robots do not have fears or inhibitions. There may be a war of cruelness in the future. Of course it is all only a fiction but it isn't impossible that it's going to come true. What we can see, anyway these days, is that human feelings and values seem to vanish and people become emotionally cold.

Approaches

In association with this described coldness exercises come up to us. We have to talk about these human values and probably have to revalue them to have a good basis in these times, too. My personal opinion is that „too human“ robots which get very close to their ideal have to be forbidden. The only problem that goes with that is that we probably won't be able to ensure this. People will continue research and development, even if secretly. What we can do is to control research and development at least. And customers have the option only to support useful and necessary robots. I don't know whether this is going to help or not. However, we have to do something to prevent the dangers. That's what anybody can do and has to do in order to keep control.
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BeitragVerfasst am: 02 Jun 2009 - 13:48:33    Titel: Re: Korrektur dieses Textes

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Introduction

Our modern world is dominated by technique and machines. This includes computers, which have become essential and really important in business and private life.
Actually, a robot is also a computer and we even use more of them than you would expect. They are not just a fictitious creation made up by script writers / science fiction authors .. Imagine this: without robotics, you wouldn't have a dishwasher the same is true for a company that wouldn't have robotic machines for their production. They really do facilitate everybody's life. But is it really true / the case or do they pose a threath for us? Could they even cause our doom? First, I will give you a little overview about how things have developed in the past centuries. After that, I will not only describe where robot technology has led us so far and may lead us further on in the future but also what we have to consider concerning..... ( in Bezug auf...was?


Definition


A robot is a stationary or mobile machine which is able to perform tasks based on a certain software.The term “Robot” is derived from Czech language and means labour or forced labour. Nowadays, this word has a different meaning / its meaning is different. We 1. associate / 2. use this term 1. with / 2.for a machine that looks like a robot and is able to perform tasks which ordinary human beings can do.


Development


Robotic machines were even / already known in the ancient world. They found records of a decimal system as early as 6000 BC.
In our time / nowadays / in modern times , the entire informatics bases on this system.
Later, the Chinese invented the first / built a / (the first) compass which allowed to pass and research the Gobi desert.
Years later, in 725 AD, it were also the Chinese to invent the first fully mechanical clock. A great step / leap forward toward real robotics was an innovation of Leonardo Da Vinci. In the 15th century he built / created a humanoid robot that looked like a soldier and was able to move some of its body parts.
The first definitely documented construction of a robot was shown then in 1737. Mr. Vaucanson built a mechanic musician as well as a mechanic duck which could perform some real duck's tasks and came really close to it.


The first automate which was really useful was a calculating machine built by Charles Babbage in 1834. This machine(comma) which was based on the idea of a loom (comma) could perform complicated operations.A few years later (comma) „Boilerplate“ appeared. He was a mechanical man created to solve conflicts between nations.(??? Wie macht er das?) Unfortunately, this great invention remained unknown for most people.

Now I will make a little jump in time to the first modern computer: It already contained all components a computer requires.
Its name was „Z1“, named by Konrad Zuse in 1935. It were not only the computers which experienced a boom but also the humanoid robots (Without the word robot, 'humanoid' sounds like a mammal... For example in 1940 (comma)when an electrical robot was published which could walk, smoke (cigarettes), count and some more.

However, that's not the most important / greatest innovation. In 1958 (comma)something began that we call a giant step / leap for mankind.
With probes going into space ?? (comma) an unmanned aerospace started.

What about:
In 1958, the first giant leap for mankind was done when an unmanned aerospace ship was brought into orbit.

A decade later (comma) robotic research was accelerated. In 1970 / in the Seventies (comma) countless new innovations appeared.

These were(comma) for example(comma) some new humanoid robots, language analysing programs, the first scientific calculator and the first robotic vehicle. These days, we have not only robots for our personal use but also for pleasure and entertainment. There are even robotic competitions where robots are playing football (against each other) (comma) whereby being able to learn and playing intelligent.Others are able to perform human tasks like walking, climbing or balancing.

The newest generation of robots unites / combines all skills in one. Robots can go, speak as well as they can interact and stand up after falling down.
Over the years(comma)
scientists have developed the robot from a simple machine / device into a complex humanoid robot
, and (it s likely that ) they will continue the refinements to more and more closely resemble a human being.

The development from the simplest mechanical machine into a computer has opened(up) new possibilities in daily life. Internet, television, mobile phones are things(comma) besides the robots(comma) which help us to get information quickly and easily wherever we are.

Advantages & Disadvantages

Good or bad - useful or useless? We ask ourselves these questions, whether or not it makes sense. And now we're asking it about our robots.
Or:
Good or bad - useful or useless, whether or not it makes sense, these are questions we often ask about our (human) experience, and now we ask them about our robots .They definitely provides us with enormous benefits but they also carry / entail problems and dangers. Therefore it is important to list all pros and cons and weigh up / consider them carefully.
The most obvious advantage is ease at work that robots give us in everyday life / or better:]The most obvious advantage is that robotics simplify and reduce daily tasks.

We already have many of them in our households . Think of a dishwasher, a washing machine, the coffee dispenser or last but not least the personal computer. They are part of our lives and are indispensable.

But we have / use robo[color=green]tics not only at home but mainly in factories / in manufactoring [/color], where they allow (for) inexpensive, quick production, especially / mainly / in particular mass production.Nowadays, next to nothing / hardly anything is hand (-) made. Foods, vehicles, electrical products as well as cosmetic articles are produced with automated Smile machines. But it must be mentioned / one has to mention that they(these products) are necessary for humans' demands these days.

Another really important fact is that robots can perform tasks which (usually) are dangerous for humans.They can walk through fire or hard reachable areas (comma) where a man has no chance to get there easily.In this way they can rescue people, or can research, for example in space, where we almost exclusively use robots only to get information.

We have many different possibilities through the technical innovation of robots, (so to speak.? sozusagen? passt hier nicht.) Technical progress combined with ease at work /better: simplification of work tasks in our life, and a solution for episodes(?? episodes geht nicht...for future generations / future problems / for a sustainable future ?) are the advantages of having robots / of robots.
While we enjoy our robots we must / should consider that they bring problems with them, too.
But some of these problems at the same time are advantages.
Or: But some of these problems overlap with the comfort / advantages that robots give us in every day life.(coincide klingt komisch.Würde ich nicht nehmen.Was wolltest du sagen? )

On the one hand, putting dishes into the dishwasher or ordering food by telephone or internet means ease at work and time saving, and on the other hand robotic machines make us lazier / more idle and inactive / oder am besten: complacent ( = overly comfortable in a negative sense)
We sit in front of our TV or PC while eating crisps or chocolate. (We eat crisps or chocolate / our meals in front of our TV or PC.) In our economy, we have another problemRobots facilitated production causes competition.

More machines does mean less work for employees and consequently unemployment. There is another problem which could pose a risk / danger in the future, though not impossible: Robots will increasingly becoming like human beings but will not have human feelings.It could even go as far as that one day, they might (entirely)replace a human being / human brains / human intelligence Will they become intelligent enough to rebel against mankind ? Or will they be more valuable for us than our old friends ?

Prediction

Robots will affect our future (generations). But in what way / how will they do that? After listing the advantages and disadvantages, the question arises: How should we proceed with this problem ? Their influence in production will probably grow ('They widen their influence' sounds for me as they do it actively) and they will replace our housekeeping. Furthermore, they will
play a more and more important role in research and in (search and) rescue of people and will replace human tasks


Jetzt hast du wiederholt ,was du oben schon nanntest.Den ganzen letzten Absatz würde ich streichen.



PAUSE-- @zwanglos has done the rest. Smile


But what are the Many Science-Fiction films already show it: Robots as warriors, as soldiers in a robotic army. Will we decide our wars in the technical state of our robots. Sure this could mean that no one will be hurt anymore but could also mean that robots fight against human beings while robots do not have fears or inhibitions. There may be a war of cruelness in the future. Of course it is all only a fiction but it isn't impossible that it's going to come true. What we can see, anyway these days, is that human feelings and values seem to vanish and people become emotionally cold.

Approaches


In association with this described coldness exercises come up to us. We have to talk about these human values and probably have to revalue them to have a good basis in these times, too. My personal opinion is that „too human“ robots which get very close to their ideal have to be forbidden. The only problem that goes with that is that we probably won't be able to ensure this. People will continue research and development, even if secretly. What we can do is to control research and development at least. And customers have the option only to support useful and necessary robots. I don't know whether this is going to help or not. However, we have to do something to prevent the dangers. That's what anybody can do and has to do in order to keep control.


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BeitragVerfasst am: 03 Jun 2009 - 18:08:36    Titel:

Our modern world is full of technology and machines. This includes computers, which have become essential and really important in business and private life. Actually, a robot is also a computer and we even use more of them than you would expect. They're not just a fictitious creation made up by film producers or science fiction authors. Imagine this: without robotics, you wouldn't have a dishwasher – the same is true for a company that wouldn't have robotic machines to work (on) their assembly lines. They really do ease everybody's life. But is that really the case, or do they pose a threat to us? Could they cause our doom? First, I will give you a little overview about how things have developed in the past centuries. After that, we will see where robots have brought and are going to bring us in the future as well as what we have to consider.
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BeitragVerfasst am: 03 Jun 2009 - 18:18:23    Titel:

der letzte Satz ist nicht gut..


After that, we will see where robots have brought and are going to bring us in the future as well as what we have to consider.



..Entweder du machts es richtig oder du lässt es Smile.

Just take my revised text and take another colour...Otherwise we have to jump up and down all the time to compare
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BeitragVerfasst am: 03 Jun 2009 - 19:06:07    Titel:

Hey, I'm just throwing up an alternate version, the topic-starter can take it or leave it.

I believe those were your words, more or less.

Anyway:

PAUSE

But what about the many science-fiction films that already depict robots as warriors, as soldiers in a robotic army? Will our wars be decided by conflicts between robots? This would certainly mean that no people would be hurt anymore, but could also mean that robots might fight against human beings, because robots do not have fears or inhibitions. There may be a cruel war in the future. Of course this is only speculation, but it isn't impossible that it's going to come true. What we can see these days, anyway, is that human feelings and values seem to vanish and people become emotionally cold.

Approaches

In association with this described coldness, some people come up with possible solutions to counteract this phenomena. People have to talk about these human values and probably have to revalue them in order to have a good foundation upon which future decisions will be made. My personal opinion is that "too human" robots which become very similar to their creators have to be forbidden. The only problem that goes with that is that we probably won't be able to ensure this. People will continue research and development, even if secretly. All we can do is try to regulate such research at least a little bit. And customers have the option only to support useful and necessary robots. I don't know whether this is going to help or not. However, we have to do something to prevent the dangers. That's what anybody can do and has to do in order to keep control.


FYI: menschenähnliche Roboter = android
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